Friday, September 23, 2011

"Did you hear?"

“Did you hear who is pregnant this school year?” asked Elizabeth, ready to gossip.

“No, who!” Katherine replied with a concerned look on her face, hoping Elizabeth didn’t guess she was.

“Dominique!”

With a sigh of relief, she said, “well, that isn’t surprising at all. I mean she puts herself out there all the time and always tries to get attention. Did you honestly think it wasn’t gonna happen sooner or later?”
“I was just trying to give her some faith, guess I shouldn’t have, huh?”

Sitting in my overly small desk, I overhear this conversation. Knowing exactly who they are talking about, getting a fat knot in my stomach. Like the time your mom makes something for dinner that makes you sick every time, and all you can do is throw up at the smell. My face slowly turning pale, eyes closing not understanding why this would happen. Not knowing if this was true or not was so difficult.
                                                                                               
Sticking my nose into something I know I shouldn’t, I did.

“Wait, so you’re telling me this is 100% true? I can’t believe that this would happen. She is smarter then that. You are lying right?” I replied. Trying my hardest to believe they were just lying, trying to start rumors because they hated this girl. Giving this girl all the credit I possibly could. Trying to stick up for her by being in denial. Unfortunately, my luck was going nowhere.

Elizabeth replied with sarcasm, “Come on Nicole, you honestly think SHE wouldn’t get pregnant before school ended? I mean, you’re just waiting to be called stupid.”

Knowing all the words that she had said were completely right, all I had to say for myself was “I was just trying to be hopeful.” You would never guess how sick a simple conversation could make you feel. Your stomach turning and feeling like it is doing back flips. Especially when that person had such a bright future and could be an extremely successful person, but now, that may not be the case …

2 comments:

  1. I love the changes that you made to it! Especially the last paragraph. You really improved on the showing aspect of it. In the sixth paragraph you made a lot of progress and I love how you described your face. Very good improvement! (:

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  2. Hey i love this peice of writing that you constructed! but oe thig that iu think you need to change is this setance,"Sticking my nose into something I know I shouldn’t, I did.". I think you eed to reword it cause i didnt really undersatndit. or you could just take it out cause its really not needed. Great job!

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